Wednesday, July 11, 2007

The continued The Greatest Backstab

Chapter 3: What??????


“Maybe Chris is right?” Holly questioned. “What, are you out of your mind? You know what thanks a lot Chris; you ruined my life in what 15 minutes.” Greg had a harsh tone. “Babe, I said maybe.” Holly assured. “Stop talking crap! You and I are meant to be together.” Greg tried to convince Holly but he felt it wasn’t working. “How many times have you said I Love you?” Holly was much freighted for the answer. Greg replied with a deep breathe, he slowly blinked his eyes and took her hands. “Now I need you to understand that…. “I knew it! You probably slept with more people than you have scored touch downs.” Her eyes started to tear. She got up and started walking toward Chris. “Wait, where you going?” Greg said with his eyebrows crunched and his arms in a small WHY body language. “Come on Chris, let’s go. I just really need to get out of this place and away from him.” Holly insisted. “Alright, let’s go. You know what go on without me I’ll catch up with you.” Chris commanded. “Okay.” Holly replied with a dim smile appearing on her face as she left the beach shore. Chris looked back to make sure Holly was gone. “Why would you throw away a great chance of love by... you know what never mind. I hope you do realize you just missed out on the greatest girl you could ever get, anyway later dude.” Chris started walking when Greg finally realized what he had done.

Chapter 4: I’m …

When Greg finally understood what he had done he raced to his car. He jumped in his 2 year old dark green convertible and stepped on the gas pedal as hard as he could. He whipped out his silver sidekick and went to contacts and scrolled down to H. “Dam it. I don’t have her number.” Greg was totally out of ideas until he thought of calling Holly’s cousin Shawn. So he scrolled down to Shawn. He dialed him. Shawn answered “Hey.” “Sup do you know Holly’s cell phone number?” Greg questioned with great expectations. “Yeah one sec, 246 – 6675” Shawn said. “Thanks dude you just saved my life, later.” Greg hung up the phone and started dialing until he realized she wouldn’t pick up if she knew it was him. So then he thought he could *67 her so that she wouldn’t know it was him. Greg swiftly dialed *67 and then her number. Meanwhile Holly picked up her phone and said “Hello? Who is this?” She questioned with great fear. “Look whose picking up the phone.” Greg gloated. “What do you want; Chris and I are on the way to the most romantic lunch spot.” Holly said in the most unwanted tone. Actually Holly and Chris weren’t on their way to a lunch spot; actually they were on their way to Holly’s house to drop her off because she doesn’t have a car. “Anyway G2G Ta ta” Holly replied in a preppy voice. After they hung up Greg had realized he heard the GPS working in the background. He recalled hearing 169 Apple Orchard Lane. The address is where Holly lives. Greg thought if he went fast enough he could beat them there. So with out a thought he made the sharpest left turn you have ever seen. Quickly Greg pulled into the driveway and sat there. He didn’t know if they were inside or not. He didn’t see Chris’s car. All of a sudden a yellow Jeep pulled in. It was Chris’s car. Holly got out and when she saw Greg her jaw dropped. She didn’t he had the guts to show up. Finally Greg to a deep breath and said I’m….

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

I will always remember this story because it was inspired by your friends and because it's funny and strange. Good job!

Maria - Broadwaygal said...

Thank you. And What did you think was the strangest part of the story because I know there are a lot of strange parts

Anonymous said...

Comments for Ch. 3~

1.) The sentence "Holly was much freighted for the answer" should be: Holly was very freighted of the answer.

2.) Put he said/she said AFTER dialog .

3.) Don't end all dialog with periods, just b/c its dialog does not mean its a complete thought.

4.) This sentence is not great: "Greg said with his eyebrows crunched and his arms in a small WHY body language."

Anonymous said...

That story was amazing

Kate F. said...

wow