Thursday, July 19, 2007

Blood Lust

Cold white skin
Brushes against mine
As you lean in to me
Your blood stained lips
From the past
Graze my neck
Your teeth get ready
For the pleasure
Your eyes turn black
Your heart is empty
We are lost in the darkness
Of the night
Far from others
Who crowd the street
In the light of day
You’re the only one who
Hears my scream pierce
The silence of the


Kenzie/Noodle said...

I dont' really get what that is about. You should put one or two sentaces taht help the rader distinguish what your talking about.

Maria said...

ACK! Scary... I can feel the scariness! Creeeeeepy! *finds a nice pony & rainbow combo to calm down*

Kenzie/Noodle said...

Never mind i reread it and i ge that its about a vampire

Angie said...

Nice imagery, Mandy. I like the blood stained lips part.

A$H_CA$H_07 said...

ooo W0W; i like it but its creepy. the decription is good. i got a good image of a vampire and a pretty young girl alone deep in the woods... but that's just me

Gina said...

Ya might wanna add the T to "nigh"... other than that, nice creepiness. >:B