Monday, July 23, 2007

Need Title and Advice

First, a wink of color

First, a wink of color

Then, a splash of pink

Next, a hint of yellow, purple, orange, green,

While I sit next to the window,

Each splash of color

Drips

Drips

Drips

And the sky turns to blue

Followed by a slew of green

Coloring trees

Grass, plants

Next comes the fading

The sky splashes colors of its own

In purples

Oranges

Reds

Pinks

And everything settles as it is washed over with gray

4 comments:

Kenzie/Noodle said...

Nice job

Kate said...

I was a little confused with the last line (are you watching a sunset?). Other than that your details and imagery was really good! :)

Maria said...

Now that I think about it, it really does sound like you are describing a sunset, where everything gets dark afterward. (Thanks, Kate!)

Maria said...

http://cwpyoungwriters.blogspot.com/2007/07/villain-villanelle.html

I would really appreciate some comments as well on this one... (sorry, ebah, for using your post to promote my own piece, but I really need some constructive criticism on this one!!!)