Thursday, July 19, 2007

COCOCOLA!

Coco-cola

silent bottle,
of black coke,
please, my clothes,
them do not soak.

Your cap is used,
for MyCoke Rewards,
you are a drink,
fit for lords.

8 comments:

Veronika said...

lol fippy this is funny

Maria said...

Cool! My only comment is that you don't really need the extra commas.

Caitlin said...

Noah aka Flippy, This is a good! I really like the last stanza esp. the part about the rewards and lords.

Bela said...

This poem is SO unique! I absolutely LOVED it! Keep up the good work!

Mackenzie said...

It's really good except for the last part of the 1st stanza. That part is confusing

Kate said...

Your poem is so unique and entertaining! My only suggestion is to try to clarify the end of the first stanza. :)

Gina said...

Haha... but you do know it's Coca-Cola, not Coco-Cola, because it's not chocolate. :D It would be cool if it were though...

Anonymous said...

I LOVE this poem! It's just so short, sweet, & to the point!