Thursday, July 24, 2008

"the pen is mighter than the sword"

The double-edged pen
Cutting and slashing to carve its way
Forging its path
Leaving in its wake the marks on those who beheld it
Quivering people’s hearts and freezing the breath on their tongues
Inspiring tribute to it and honor to it
The stains of its work clear and stark on the white plains
The ink stained sword

The ink stained sword
The stains of its work, clear and stark on the White Plains,
Inspiring tribute to it and honor to it
Quivering people’s hearts and freezing the breath on their tongues
Leaving in its wake the marks on those who beheld it
Forging its path
Cutting and slashing to carve its way
The double-edged pen

4 comments:

Mike said...

Luke, I love the way you say the double-edged pen and the ink-stained sword as the same thing and I'm proud to have come up with the title of this amazing piece.

Gumdrop :-] said...

the poem is good.....i liked the mirror part it flows perfectly

Gina said...

This would be a great piece to read out loud. The only thing is that the pen is mightier than the sword (with an a), but other than that you have created a mirror poem that works just as well forwards or backwards. I love that the pen is inflicting the same damages and results as a sword- "double-edged pen" is an ingenious phrase.

Emily D. said...

i loved this, you used the mirror technique really well so that there was a slightly different meaning the second time, not just the same thing over again. i also loved the imagery and the use of "quivering", didnt know it could be used in that kind of verb but it works.