Thursday, January 10, 2008

Lastly Spoken

Whispering.

Stuttering.

Weakness.

Forcing out the words,

“I’ll never forget you.

I will always remember you,

Forever and ever.”

Regret.

He turns and walks away,

Slowly fading,

A distant memory.

Dreaming.

Remembering.

Wanting.

Trying to remember once again,

That special person,

Who is gone.

Gone forever.

His last words,

Still fresh in your mind,

Never truly absorbed.

“I’ll never forget you.

I will always remember you,

Forever and ever.”

16 comments:

Maddie said...

this is sooooooo good. what r the reasons though????????

Bela said...

Thanks!
What do you mean by reasons?

Maddie said...

well the labels, u no the things u look up said they rnt the reasons u would think tho.

Bela said...

Well, they can be anything, relate to anyone. All it takes is a little imagination.

Gina said...

This also sounds to me like the beginning of a novel, for some reason. The narrator would be wonderfully flawed. I love that this is written in the second person- that can be tricky to deal with but usually ends up as a more impressive piece.

Maddie said...

I agree, bela, just truly amazing..............this blows me away.

Bela said...

Thanks guys!!! Maddie knows what this is about...she just doesn't realize it. Oh Maddie...

Maddie said...
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Bela said...

Could you, like, delete that name from the page. You know what name I mean. I don't really want anyone (him) to see it.

Maddie said...

how would he????

Maddie said...

happy now????????

[comment dripping with sarcasm]

Bela said...

Har-de-har-har. You're hilarious. As a matter of fact, I AM happy now.
Actually, I don't know how he would know. But there's no sense in risking it.

Maria said...

All of these comments would be quite excellent as the beginning of one of those novels where it's not straightforward prose & dialogue but it's bits and pieces of stuff (a la Trial by Journal, which I would highly recommend to everyone).
It's almost Snicket-like (and I say this with only the most complimentary intentions).

Maria said...

"He turns and walks away, Slowly fading,"

LOVE IT! I would quote more of your lines, but it's just that all of them work so well!!! You are truly special! (& I don't mean it like we meant it when we were on the van to & from Fairfield U!)

Bela said...

Thanks Maria!
Don't worry, I've changed a lot since then. I'm not as spastic.

Maddie said...

yeah rite, u are just a more sophisticated spas.