Friday, January 11, 2008

Life Story

If I stand on the rooftops,

I look down at my story.






My journeys,

my adventures.

All that I have been through

is there.

I close my eyes and I try,

I try to remember.

Every detail sinks in,

every detail of my life.

Every second of pain,

every second of pleasure.

I open my eyes,

and my life is before me.

My entire life,

Is in my hands.


Maddie said...

this is soooooo good. hard 2 read w/ the black letters but it sets a kinda cool mood. i luv it and u. call me, cus i guess uve figured out i am no longer gonna call except 2 make plans until March. SO THERE!!!!!!!

Bela said...

Thanks Maddie!!! I'll call you...

Maddie said...


Gina said...

Ohhhhh, I LOVE the opening line. It sounds like the beginning of a movie trailer (that's a good thing, in this case). Did you take a look at this in paragraph form? For me, it almost looks better that way. This piece definitely has the potential to flow into some longer story. Keep it up! :D

Maddie said...

gina is right. it is amazing both ways but could also be an easier opening to a beggining of an essay that u'll have to do or a story u'll hav 2 right.

Bela said...

Thanks guys!!! Gina, about the first line: this was also for school, as you can tell from the description. Have you ever heard of Ellis Paul, that singer? My English class did a whole unit on poetry and his lyrics. So, I chose "Take All The Sky You Need" as my song. I chose that line to start it off. But it does lead into the poem. Look at the description again. It thanks Ellis Paul.