If I stand on the rooftops,
I look down at my story.
Anger.
Remorse.
Betrayal.
Joy.
Sorrow.
My journeys,
my adventures.
All that I have been through
is there.
I close my eyes and I try,
I try to remember.
Every detail sinks in,
every detail of my life.
Every second of pain,
every second of pleasure.
I open my eyes,
and my life is before me.
My entire life,
Is in my hands.
6 comments:
this is soooooo good. hard 2 read w/ the black letters but it sets a kinda cool mood. i luv it and u. call me, cus i guess uve figured out i am no longer gonna call except 2 make plans until March. SO THERE!!!!!!!
Thanks Maddie!!! I'll call you...
gr8
Ohhhhh, I LOVE the opening line. It sounds like the beginning of a movie trailer (that's a good thing, in this case). Did you take a look at this in paragraph form? For me, it almost looks better that way. This piece definitely has the potential to flow into some longer story. Keep it up! :D
gina is right. it is amazing both ways but could also be an easier opening to a beggining of an essay that u'll have to do or a story u'll hav 2 right.
Thanks guys!!! Gina, about the first line: this was also for school, as you can tell from the description. Have you ever heard of Ellis Paul, that singer? My English class did a whole unit on poetry and his lyrics. So, I chose "Take All The Sky You Need" as my song. I chose that line to start it off. But it does lead into the poem. Look at the description again. It thanks Ellis Paul.
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