tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post7127590846962441326..comments2023-05-29T05:28:07.235-04:00Comments on CWP Young Writers: night essay- lauren mUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-58971116693648596922008-05-31T19:40:00.000-04:002008-05-31T19:40:00.000-04:00thank you sooooooooo much! u guys r amazing!!!!!thank you sooooooooo much! u guys r amazing!!!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-26031738022851040212008-05-31T14:43:00.000-04:002008-05-31T14:43:00.000-04:00ok, listen to gina, i just read the finished essay...ok, listen to gina, i just read the finished essay.<BR/><BR/>this is really good, but a few suggestions (among other things)...<BR/><BR/>1. elaborate a little (or a lot!!!!).... ms. bashar seems to like all the facts she can get. the more u give her the better grade you'll probably get.<BR/><BR/>2.i love the end of your conclusion, that seems like one of the stronger parts of your piece.<BR/><BR/Maddiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16931137327341560708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-51861401161781677972008-05-31T12:53:00.001-04:002008-05-31T12:53:00.001-04:00Hah! I spelled thorough wrong.Hah! I spelled thorough wrong.Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07481111584970132557noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-76007246833728047582008-05-31T12:53:00.000-04:002008-05-31T12:53:00.000-04:00Hi Lauren, this is Gina, one of the people who wen...Hi Lauren, this is Gina, one of the people who went to CWP last summer with Maddie. As Maddie can tell you, I'm a pretty thourough editor and can probably help you a lot in the way of grammar and rephrasing things. Don't take anything I say too harshly, because I'm not judging you, I'm helping to rework some words, if that makes any sense. :D<BR/><BR/>Okay, I'm guessing you guys are supposed to Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07481111584970132557noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-83518093040049141032008-05-28T16:45:00.001-04:002008-05-28T16:45:00.001-04:00srry the anonymous was me by accident.srry the anonymous was me by accident.Maddiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16931137327341560708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-18730592526681861772008-05-28T16:45:00.000-04:002008-05-28T16:45:00.000-04:00hey lauren..... this really improved, keep it up. ...hey lauren..... this really improved, keep it up. i am definately impressed. ms. bashar will definately at least give u a B+, if not higher.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com