tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post6767875602417485220..comments2023-05-29T05:28:07.235-04:00Comments on CWP Young Writers: I'm going to dieUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-2786137667007090692008-10-16T11:57:00.000-04:002008-10-16T11:57:00.000-04:00thanks for your suggestions maria!:]thanks for your suggestions maria!:]Joanna K.https://www.blogger.com/profile/07699907054935066238noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-41075741309506008652008-10-15T21:17:00.000-04:002008-10-15T21:17:00.000-04:00I also really liked how the poem starts and ends w...I also really liked how the poem starts and ends with descriptions of her eyes and the line "She's/I'm going to die."<BR/><BR/>One thing: the verb "whisk" has an H in it, unlike the cleaning product.<BR/><BR/>Other than that, amazing! You get really good emotions and story across.Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10381618075198783212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-51122165164493787462008-10-15T21:12:00.000-04:002008-10-15T21:12:00.000-04:00I love how this poem really gets to the point- no ...I love how this poem really gets to the point- no frills.<BR/><BR/>What a great phrase- "school picture smile"! That really captures the fakeness, the requirement of the smile.<BR/><BR/>Lovely word choice throughout.Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10381618075198783212noreply@blogger.com