tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post2833536537249645545..comments2023-05-29T05:28:07.235-04:00Comments on CWP Young Writers: Galway County, WisconsinUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-39880470186065662392009-10-26T19:19:28.805-04:002009-10-26T19:19:28.805-04:00Thanks for the compliments, Kenzie! :)
I wanted...Thanks for the compliments, Kenzie! :) <br /><br /> I wanted to repeat that to enforce the fact that he was losing his sense of reality and escaping into complete delusions. <br /><br />In that part, "it" referred to his fist, not him, but I can see how it would be more helpful to say "he".<br /><br />My teacher really really liked the story, and seemed almost jealous of Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07481111584970132557noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3416648419703683331.post-90500148712083782182009-10-21T21:47:56.320-04:002009-10-21T21:47:56.320-04:00Oooo this is really good Gina! I love the part wit...Oooo this is really good Gina! I love the part with the cider melting the tablecloth i don't really know why though. And i also love his outfit =). Ok this isn't really criticism but at the part where u say "He forgot he was a sixty-three year old man in Wisconsin; in his mind he was a strong young man in Ireland." and then you repeate "he forgot" i think you should Mackenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07147402938648601629noreply@blogger.com